Sunday, November 24, 2013

Oh Hamlet, you scoundrel

In the past _ amount of days it has been since I posted a response to course material (it just flies by.) We have not done much in class besides read Hamlet, seeing how it’s a rather long play, Shakespeare's longest by the way (thanks Google), this is to be expected. Before this year, I had never read Hamlet, and I kinda (more like always) struggled with Shakespeare. I think it’s the double meaning and references that trip me up, probably because I'm not from fifteenth century England.
Aside from Hamlet, we did do a syntax drill; may I suggest that we get new and exciting pictures, possibly from Black sheep or parahnacanda? I too struggle with not viewing the full videos (you aren't alone Ms. Holmes) Any way, getting back to the point of the whole drill, I think it really shows how much conflict we can have in class, because each and every word is nit-picked until we all want to strangle each other. I don't think that that is the point, but it’s a true problem that I have to live with. The whole debate on whether the boat was going into the cave rather than leaving it has aged me greatly. I am now a feeble old woman on the inside.

Other than that drill, we haven’t done much rather than reading and finishing Hamlet. To be honest, I think that the play is hilarious. The ending is just so ridiculous, I can’t help but laugh. The whole part where Fortinbras just walks in and everyone is dead, I can only imagine what he must've been thinking (other than the obvious "whaaat?"). And the whole part where Hamlet calls Ophelia a prostitute is funny too, but only after you find out that she's pregnant with his child, because he’s basically admits to trying to marry a prostitute.

Sunday, November 17, 2013

My struggles with technology are made embarrassingly clear: an open prompt.

Ayooooooo- so whenever I try to post the link to the prompt, the link just takes me to all of the prompts, which doesn't help anyone, because then you don't know which one I read. so I'll give you blow by blow details. this is the link to all of the writing prompts:
I read the 2006 question 2 essays. The one about Oscar Wilde's Lady Windermere's fan. Its a fun time.
In the first essay that I read, the writer got straight to the point. There wasn't an introduction, which bothered me, but It helped them with their scoring, because I noticed that the other two essays didn't really get to the point. The second essay was far better than the last, which didn't really have any organization what so ever.
The first essay follows the question asked quite nicely, staying organized and following the thesis paragraph. Each point is clearly defined and goes into some real nice detail. I also liked how the writer made the actual handwriting legible, something that not everyone does. Overall, I agree with giving this essay an 8, it is very clear and easy to follow, the points are clear and concise, and they are also looked at in vivid detail. I agree with the AP reader when they say that there are “small lapses… but not enough to keep this essay from making a strong case for the student’s interpretation of character and situation.”
The second essay is a pain. The writing itself is okay, but the handwriting switches from cursive to print to chicken scratch. (**NOTE** don’t do this, it makes people want to stop being your friend) There is writing all over the page, and things are not fully crossed out, so it’s confusing, and then you go back and realize that the whole sentence wasn't supposed to be part of the essay. I think if the writer would have just crossed things out better, it would have (maybe) led to a somewhat better score, because after reading it, I am super confused and I’m still not completely sure of what I should have read and what was crossed out.
After that long rant, let’s get to the actual writing of this essay, rather than trashing them more on their presentation. The AP readers were looking for how two characters interact and how they are both very deeply written. However, this writer only wrote about the characters on the surface level. They didn't even mention how they interact, besides throwing in some quotes. The paragraphs are just a list of each of their views. I agree with the AP reader when they say that it would be better if the writer made less claims and analyzed more, but I don’t understand how this got a 5. I think that this essay is more of a 3 or 4.

The last essay is much easier to read, however, that might not be a good thing. The writer clearly doesn't understand the task that has been given them. The essay is focused on two character’s views and how it relates to society. This was not what was asked, and there for their grade suffers. In addition, the writer doesn't speak about how deep the two characters are, and they forget to mention how they interact with each other. This is a problem, mainly because that is what the prompt is asking. Finally, the essay doesn't analyze anything, I agree with the AP reader when he says “we have left the world of analysis and have entered the realm of polemics.” Although I think that the reader could have toned down the sass, it is a truthful statement.

Wednesday, November 13, 2013

Death of a salesman: what it means.


The death of a salesman.
Author: Arthur Miller
Setting: Mainly in the Loman household, where the roof is missing, and the walls are incomplete
Characters
Willy Loman: Willy is the main character; he is in his late sixties and suffers from reoccurring memories. He has been in many car accidents in the past, and is also plagued with depression, in the end, he kills himself.
Linda Loman: Linda is Willy’s wife, and treats him like a child, he takes up so much of her time, that she doesn’t have time for her own children, who are struggling to get by.
Biff Loman: In the past, Biff was a successful football player, but when he found out that his father was cheating on his mother, his life started to crumble. Since then, he hasn’t gotten a higher education, and struggles to find permanent employment. He has a hard time not stealing things, and has gone to jail for it.
Happy Loman: an extremely sexualized character, Happy tries to make everyone happy. He lies his way into women’s hearts, and even sleeps with his peers’ fiancĂ©es. He is almost always ignored.
Uncle Ben: In the book, we only see Willy’s memory of Ben. We know that Ben went to Africa and obtained quite a bit of money there, this is not obtained in a dignified manner. In the end, it is the memory of Ben that convinces Willy to kill himself.
Charlie: The neighbor to the Loman’s, Charlie loan Willy money every week, and even offers him a job, but Willy never takes it. He is the father of Bernard.
Bernard: He is more of what today’s society would call a successful child; he studied hard in school, and is now a big time lawyer. As a child, he helped Biff cheat his way through high school. This later hurts Biff.
Howard: He is Willy’s employer in the present. In the past, Howard’s father employer Willy, Willy even helped name him. Near the end, Howard fires Willy.
The woman: Known to the audience, the woman is a prostitute, because of her obsession with stockings. However, in the play, she is a secretary. She is only physically seen once in the play, but her voice is heard throughout.

Summary: In the beginning, Willy gets into a car crash; he is shown after the accident, tired and hungry. We see Linda for the first time taking care of him, taking his shoes off, feeding him, and humming him to sleep after he gets into an argument with Charlie on cards. Biff and Happy are seen in their old room, catching up with each other. We see Willy’s first flashback of Ben, and off the bat are weary of him. He tells of his work in Africa, and we can assume that he made his living dishonestly. Later on this is proven to be true.” The Woman” is repeatedly mentioned, even when they aren’t talking about the same woman that Willy cheated on Linda with.
The Loman family has a conversation, and this is where we see that Willy isn’t right in the head. He starts to contradict himself, and he turns against Linda, who is supposed to be like his mother. He gets angry and starts to have a flashback of when Biff and Willy were young.
There is a lot of focus on the kitchen area; this is where most of the play takes place. The scene opens to Willy drinking coffee, we know that the boys were out early because Linda tells Willy that as she cooks him breakfast. They talks about how much money they owe, and it turns to malfunctioning technology. Willy decides that he wants to talk to his boss, Howard, to see if he can get a job working locally.
When Willy visits Howard, he is shown a recorder. Howard is amazed by it, and refuses to hear Willy out. In the end, Howard fired Willy, and leaves him alone with the recorder. The second Willy touches the recorder; it breaks and starts to play random snippets of the recording. Howard has to rush in and unplug it.
After he visits Howard, Willy goes to borrow more money from Charlie, and sees Bernard. Bernard is very busy and tells Willy that his is supposed to argue a case in front of the Supreme Court. Willy is happy for him, and sees him off. Charlie comes out and gives Willy all the money that he needs to pay the bills, particularly his life insurance. He offers Willy a job, but Willy absolutely refuses to take it.
After visiting Charlie, Willy goes to have dinner with his sons. Before Willy shows up, Happy has a table and spots a beautiful woman (also maybe a prostitute) he puts on the charm and gets her to go get a friend for Biff. He lies and tells the ladies that Biff plays football professionally. When Willy shows up, Biff tells him how he didn’t get the money from his old employer, so he cannot start a sports team, and Willy gets upset. He stars to have a flashback in the bathroom, and this is where we meet The Woman.
We start off hearing someone knocking on the door, and her asking Willy to answer it, but doesn’t. Eventually, he makes her go into the bathroom, and opens the door to a young Biff, he had just failed his math test, and wanted Willy to go and talk with his teacher. The Woman walks out and Biff Realizes what was happening.  The woman makes a fuss about her stockings, and is eventually forced out of the door. Biff is visibly upset, and leaves with tears streaming down his face.
When the boys get back from the restaurant, Linda is in the house, ready to pounce on them. She yells at them and is visibly angry. Out in the back yard, Willy is trying to plant seeds, and is talking with his imaginary Ben. This is when Ben convinces him that it’s a good idea to kill himself. They all talk for a while, and then decide to go to bed. After everyone is upstairs, Willy goes out into the car, and that is where the play ends.
Theme: Arthur Miller’s “Death of a salesman” comments that America’s conformist society inhibits the pursuit of one’s dreams, which can lead to tragic outcomes.
Imagery: We get most of our imagery from the stage directions, and sounds that flow through the entire play. The detail is vivid, making the imagery even more important. It shows Willy as unstable, and crazy, and leaves the reader a bit confused and annoyed.
Symbolism: There are many symbols in this play, for example the car is a symbol of Willy, because it is constantly referred to, and it is constantly under repair from the accidents.
The seeds represent Willy’s Children. Willy forces the seeds into the ground, even though we know that they won’t grow, Linda tells Willy many times that there isn’t enough sunlight, but tries anyway.
The recorder represents Willy’s mind. He is broken; he changes his memory to what he wants to remember. But the recorder can’t do that. It can play back the past perfectly, and this forces Willy to remember correctly what happened that day, when Biff found out about the woman.

Sunday, November 10, 2013

Obamacare: how to turn a boring subject into something less boring.

In an enthralling article, E.J Dionne JR. writes about today’s issue of Obama care. I know that we’ve all heard way too much fuss about it already, but I really think that this piece is a good read. I do think that the Dionne could have used some more quotes to show his point of view, or at least helped his argument, but I think that if he had added more, he would have had to give up other parts of his article to keep it somewhat brief.
That being said, I would like to get down and dirty with this article. I noticed that this article is trying to be disguised as straight news (news that doesn’t show opinions) until mid-article. Personally, I think that this is a scummy way to write, because it almost tricks the reader into thinking something that they might not have initially thought, but the way that it is done is nearly flawless, and as an aspiring journalist, I nearly begin to drool. The flow of the straight news to opinion is so beautiful I almost want to curl up into a ball and weep at my own writing technique. If only.
Another thing that I noticed was the question as a beginning sentence. Normally this is a huge no no in the journalistic world. It’s almost like the comic sans of journalism. It looks childish and can get annoying after a while, but I think that in this form it works quite nicely. The fact that the whole first paragraph (which is a tad on the longer side, normally a turn off for me, but here it yet again works to the writers advantage) is just a list of questions works to help get Dionne’s point across, and subconsciously plants the answers into your brain. At first, it can seem a little obnoxious that Dionne chose these questions, and then left you hanging, but he eventually answers them in the end, making it even more satisfying than if he had just straight up answered them in the beginning. (Yet another technique that I wish to acquire.)

The last thing that I wanted to bring to light was the lack of versatility in sentence length.  (and the fact that this writer seems to be making all the wrong decisions, and somehow coming up with better end product than most people who make the right decisions. Witchcraft.) All of the sentences are relatively the same length. Why then does my eye gallop across the line like sea biscuit across the clouds? I don’t know. And it really bothers me. Like, a lot.